Gerry,I have read this several times and conclude, that not only is it shorter, than some previous pieces, but is actually rather sweet, in a strange way. I like!
I had to read this one out loud. Twice. It was delicious.
@Eileen: Cheers.@Willow: Very low calorie too!
This is really pretty I especially love the last stanza!Pamela
@flaubert: great name. thanks for stopping by. this was courtesy of insomnia and a cigarette.
para-diddles of of windless flash...i believe gerry diddle is an american slang....am i close...??n i could say when i read it....that this was born to insomnia.....beautiful
@manik: well, one meaning or 'paradiddle' is a drumming rudiment. the american slang meaning of 'diddle' is, roughly, 'to mess around or fiddle with". cf. Bo Diddley also. so there are layers of meaning. I hope you can find one that works for you. I've already said too much. ;-)
sorry for making you do that....curiosity ...from where i come from slangs do not even make it to an authentic database of any form....so you could understand a certain charm that a regional slang would present to someone like me...thanku..
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just like when a child ostensibly abuses....beautiful lines..tke cre...
Glad to be part of your group of four on Poets United! Hello to you.I like this poem very much.
this is a strange and compelling one; I like how you manage to find a title and then wrap it and weave into it with pieces of the poem it introduces....this one feels circular, in way, maybe it's the orb.
@Mary: Cheers.@Harlequin: Strange yes. Compelling? Glad you thought so. Just looking at an orb spider. Great web engineering from those little creatures. And a rich source for metaphor. Cheers.
Wow, I love this poem. I love the shorter style! The middle stanza is my favorite; it has such a nice rhythm to it, and the repetition of "nothing" is really powerful.
@Chris: I go short, I long. Why I do not know. ;-)
I like this a lot. Some great strings of sound: "diddles" and "windless," "nothing to prick in the sticky..."I love your overall capture of the "damp," "moist," and "sticky" (sometimes stinky) breath of summer.
@Megan: :-) BTW, got a hardcopy of fosebook. looks awesome.
Wonderful sultry, multi-layered summer piece, Gerry. Especially like para-diddle.
Okay, I thought this sounded awfully familiar.
@willow: smooches. the second comment is a mystery, though. ?
all this, but to describe a moment. i wanna hang in there somewhere so bad. and just freeze into a picture..lovely, Gerry.:)
@dream horn: welcome and thanks. all aboard! next train to a moment is now.