Was it in a nightly rite of purple pique
that the wobbly stanchion light was lit
and gilded with a thin taut elastic strip?
Perhaps this was only light for quiet eyes.
So easy to be fooled by the early rings
of baked and boiled dough, day old moldy
but flash frozen first or so it's come told:
kinky perks, smoky karaoke in night's pane,
she tapped with evaporated paint exhaling,
that it's its own guard for an evening stance.
At Last was echoed through the rabbit count,
sweeping, dissipated, with incidental focus,
prone with one leg straight, one knee akimbo
to sail past yesterday and tomorrow's swirl,
unafraid to mark that evening sky as brilliant
in an inner teeming puddle of startled starlings,
where certainty is assured by uncertainty
and that feeder flock full of noisy finches
brings ripened grains fully chocked of nijer.
The slap of time that excites the nose
whispers go, little redwing, flutter past
the bales of dried grass that seeded winter
through the squawky radio static of geese-
it's hard to really see with eyes sewed shut
there is no way to crisscross court the warmth.
A good-looking man in tan pants and a blazer
enters the hive of commerce briskly strapping
with our Mary of the holy sporting harness
in the middle of a sacred sandwich half and
half again you can smell the perfume of ecstasy
and rejoice and let us squirt, again exhausted.
Thinking of dogs and a blackbird appears
prompting a peripheral pump of adrenaline-
this was not what we expected in early race
a chignon of meaning that almost teases time,
the roar of the manila leaf bag drifts into sky
past where is parked the crap-mobile this time,
not lashed by hair outside the serene call of nylon
repressed desire resolved in tinting windows rolled
begalia pollen a mark that is always washed away
it starts to get interesting right about now-
done in by ruminating ovine, moon equipped
and no longer sanctioned by a state of grace
he officates from two wheels screeching rust,
available inside delivery and liftgate service
sensing movement where there is none, whoa,
and a feathered fight for the last french fry.
To be the possum unloved by many at sunset
with a slinky tail that can prove delightful
but only when it's crepuscular and easy.
That was quite a funny read to me - dunno whether it was meant to be but some lines just made me chuckle...
ReplyDeleteI liked the 'serene call of nylon' - Nylon, there's just something about it!
@Mr. Anotnionioni: Most of my poems are supposed to be funny. That being said, I make no claims as to the normality of my sense of humour. Ha!
ReplyDeleteExtremely clever write! Such jesting imagery! I fully enjoyed every stanza.
ReplyDelete@KCM: Thx. The best thing about your comment was prompting me to read your blog.
ReplyDeleteYou can't be serious. Where did you study?
ReplyDeleteVictoria Jones,
Writer-in-Residence, York University
This is interesting..a trip of the mind that is held by a"thin taut elastic strip" that allows the reader to crane his/her neck to follow you. Then you snap it back to control, "only when it's crepuscular and easy."
ReplyDelete@Ms. Jones: That bad, eh?
ReplyDelete@Ms. Tchir: Interesting read on your part. Cheers.
Yes, so bad that it's impossible to believe you're writing serious poetry. I commented because I'm genuinely curious as to whether you write for the purpose of mocking poetry, or if you're simply a lazy writer that can't be bothered to learn a thing or two about basic poetic form, structure, etc.
ReplyDeleteIt seems you start with a thoughtful intent, but become terminally distracted by your thesaurus.
If you take yourself seriously as a writer, why not give your art the dedication it deserves. Take a class. Learn a few basics so that you can put those hifalutin words and primal concepts together in a more readable fashion. Give the writer snobs out there reason to applaud you rather than laugh at you.
Victoria
@Anonymous: Thanks for the reply. Interesting observations if a bit tired and academic for my tastes. "Every attempt is another kind failure" isn't it? I don't care about the MaFiA and their snobbery and puffery. If I give them a good laugh, at least I've contributed a moment of joy to the world. I do not purport to be doing anything more than "messin' 'round with words" for my own amusement. What the reader takes, they bring themselves. Any conceptual framework that can be codified such that it leads to the ultimately pompous "this is Poetry!" will eventually fade from fashion and be replaced by a new shiny object of devotion. In fact, trying to define poetry in non-poetic terms is a bit daft, isn't it? (cf. Yeats, The Scholars) Thanks for trying to learn me Victoria: it didn't take. Aw, Horsefeathers! Ha!
ReplyDeleteTo Anonymous (and other "critics") on W.S. Merwin's birthday -
ReplyDelete"Berryman," by W.S. Merwin
I will tell you what he told me
in the years just after the war
as we then called
the second world war
don't lose your arrogance yet he said
you can do that when you're older
lose it too soon and you may
merely replace it with vanity
just one time he suggested
changing the usual order
of the same words in a line of verse
why point out a thing twice
he suggested I pray to the Muse
get down on my knees and pray
right there in the corner and he
said he meant it literally
it was in the days before the beard
and the drink but he was deep
in tides of his own through which he sailed
chin sideways and head tilted like a tacking sloop
he was far older than the dates allowed for
much older than I was he was in his thirties
he snapped down his nose with an accent
I think he had affected in England
as for publishing he advised me
to paper my wall with rejection slips
his lips and the bones of his long fingers trembled
with the vehemence of his views about poetry
he said the great presence
that permitted everything and transmuted it
in poetry was passion
passion was genius and he praised movement and invention
I had hardly begun to read
I asked how can you ever be sure
that what you write is really
any good at all and he said you can't
you can't you can never be sure
you die without knowing
whether anything you wrote was any good
if you have to be sure don't write
@richfigel: spot on. thanks. reminds me of:
ReplyDeleteCome with old Khayyam and leave the wise
to talk. One thing is certain that time flies.
One thing certain and the rest is lies.
The rose that blooms once forever dies.
Gerry,
ReplyDeleteI admire your sense of autonomy. Art is that. We are not all (as in all of us) about being refined, defined, pegged and holed. What's important is that you mean to express something that matters to you. Artistic style, sex and religion are so very personal. I may not be fond of your style, but I've come to learn that following convention doesn't make us un-worthy. It just makes us different.
Pardon me. But you are SO different that I wasn't sure you were serious. I had to ask.
I wish you the best of luck in your creative and personal peregrinations. (I know you'll look that up. Then use it in your poetry.)
Yours truly,
Victoria (Word Lover)
At first I was so glad you came around to my way of thinking and then you go and ruin it all by calling me a falcon. Rats!
ReplyDeletelove this. Especially the ending.
ReplyDelete@EATING P: Thanks for the read. According to your blog, you seem to like Poetry. ;-)
ReplyDeletei'm not sure what i enjoyed more - the poem or the saucy little exchange that followed. :)
ReplyDelete@joaquin: thx. yes, just having a little fun with a prissy critic. very amusing, no?
ReplyDeletesaucy and prissy---now who can beat a combination like that??
ReplyDeletei liked the long and languid narrative feel of your piece, here. and the starlings line, that was nice. i also liked the birds all over the thing !
@Harlequin: Yes, it is a delightful combination. Have to consider that phrase for my next failure. Appreciate the read as always. Cheers.
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