See now the yellow finch of bullet sleek and
flitting over a steep place of rocks and scrub
where against steady white crashes so tightly cling
tufts of aqua sea grass washed velvet by rhythmic tides
in a place where blond ponies strut and breed
among dunes with crusted sap loblolly pines
bent by constant wind across the salty marsh
where the storm has cut an inlet to be sure.
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"...in a place where blond ponies strut and breed
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is sublime.
Very evocative. Good piece.
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~Ron
Yeah. The ponies got me too...
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liked the ending...somehow cut in suddenly and fittingly. I bet if I counted the syllables and looked at the internal relationships of assonance and other songs words sing to each other, I'd find you doing something very sophisticated. But i just liked reading it. Thanks for it -
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Gerry,
ReplyDeleteI love this. So beautiful, the great imagery as usual carried me there.
Wonderful, Gerry. Great sound combinations and sparkling, original images.
ReplyDeleteReally enjoyed the 'rhythmic tides' that made this poem really flow. If you ever fancy lobbing a poem or two over to Catapult to Mars, please do!
ReplyDeleteYour imagery is stunning.
ReplyDeleteWow! Thanks for all the reads. I've been quiet lately. Wasn't gonna write poetry for awhile. Then, I couldn't stop myself.
ReplyDelete@willow: With all the sand I was sorely tempted but resisted you know what. Ha!
@dave king: cheers.
@lesifin: wild. wild horses. i'll catch them someday.
@OLD: Will do. Thanks.
@333: Interesting observation as always. Didn't notice that consciously myself other then wanting an abrupt ending for reasons I didn't consciously fathom.
@Akeith: Much obliged and you know I value your opinion.
@Megan: Assateague just evokes so much. What a beautiful place that the fates blew us into!
@Gordon: Thanks Gordon. If my output increases from the current trickle, I sure will.
@SR Mc: Thank you for reading. Much Obliged.
such a sensory delight; i liked the images and sounds and could almost feel the wind.
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@Harlequin: Ya gotta watch the ponies. They bite!
ReplyDeleteI'm a sucker for your travel and nature pieces, especially when loblolly pines are mentioned.
ReplyDelete#Katrina: Glad you like them. They're companion pieces to the Astral Nomads take I guess. Not exactly my usual style. Not sure if I like them exactly, just trying to keep my chops crisp.
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